Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the 21st century,

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are widely used for entertainment and study purpose.

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, one group of people ponder that they are the symbol of violence but

other

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group opines that it is inevitable for the protection of extinct

animals

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.In

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essay, I will explain both views and I strongly

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that human beings not needed various

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, most of the

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violated the freedom and dignity of living creatures, that need their natural

habitant

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habitat

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to live peacefully.

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, the officials or the

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caretakers

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care takers

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abused or forced wild

animals

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for making money or entertaining visitors.In my

views

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, they have to

fulfill

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natural instincts like hunting and matting. Sadly,

an artificial homes

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zoos

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can't give them proper

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, recently American psychological association conducted

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animal behaviour survey in 10 different

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different countries. Admittedly,

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says that

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the majority

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of the caged

animals

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are depressed and

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destroyed

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in their

life

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. So

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expressed a violation of rights among animal's

life

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. Apparently, the other statement is that

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can be more beneficial for saving wild

animals

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reality human interference towards

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forests

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or nature brings the trend of protection of

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. Reportedly,

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of the world environment

destroyed

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due to farming and industrial development. So wild

animals

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need more protection from

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this

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environmental

destructions

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.To illustrate

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, in the world only 1500 wild

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are left.Majority of them living in

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apply

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zoos

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because of the destruction of the bamboo lands they don't get enough food .

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make

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the zoologists recommendation of captivating these

animals

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, people can save them through

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but

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the

life

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their

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can't compare with

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nature. In

conclusion

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every

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animals

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in the world have their own right to live in the natural surroundings that

means

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no one can replace their home. Captivating

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anyone

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any one

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means violence or curtailing the freedom of

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. So I strongly disagree with the notion of

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

321 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

animal welfare
conservation
captive breeding
habitat
ethical issues
zoochosis
endangered species
genetic diversity
reintroduction programs
wildlife education
sanctuary
natural living conditions
artificial environments
behavioral enrichment
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Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

People these days watch TV, films and other programmes alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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