Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the 21st century,
zoos
are widely used for entertainment and study purpose. However
, one group of people ponder that they are the symbol of violence but other
group opines that it is inevitable for the protection of extinct Correct quantifier usage
another
animals
.In this
essay, I will explain both views and I strongly believes
that human beings not needed various Change the verb form
believe
zoos
.
To begin
, most of the zoos
violated the freedom and dignity of living creatures, that need their natural habitant
to live peacefully. Correct your spelling
habitat
Consequently
, the officials or the Correct your spelling
caretakers
care takers
abused or forced wild Correct your spelling
caretakers
animals
for making money or entertaining visitors.In my views
, they have to Fix the agreement mistake
view
fulfill
natural instincts like hunting and matting. Sadly, Change the spelling
fulfil
an artificial homes
like Correct the article-noun agreement
artificial homes
an artificial home
zoos
can't give them proper life
.For example
, recently American psychological association conducted a
animal behaviour survey in 10 different Change the article
an
zoos
of
different countries. Admittedly, Change preposition
in
report
says that Correct article usage
the report
majority
of the caged Correct article usage
the majority
animals
are depressed and detroited
in their Correct your spelling
destroyed
Detroit
life
. So zoos
expressed a violation of rights among animal's life
.
Apparently, the other statement is that zoos
can be more beneficial for saving wild animals
. Correct your spelling
In
Inn
reality human interference towards Correct your spelling
In
forest
or nature brings the trend of protection of Fix the agreement mistake
forests
animals
. Reportedly, majority
of the world environment Correct article usage
the majority
destroyed
due to farming and industrial development. So wild Add a missing verb
is destroyed
animals
need more protection from this
environmental Correct determiner usage
these
destructions
.To illustrate Fix the agreement mistake
destruction
this
, in the world only 1500 wild panda's
are left.Majority of them living in Change the noun form
pandas
panda
the
Correct article usage
apply
zoos
because of the destruction of the bamboo lands they don't get enough food . This
make
the zoologists recommendation of captivating these Change the verb form
makes
animals
. Although
, people can save them through zoos
but
the Remove the conjunction
apply
life
in their
can't compare with Replace the word
there
the
nature.
In Correct article usage
apply
conclusion
every Add a comma
,conclusion
animals
in the world have their own right to live in the natural surroundings that Change to a singular noun
animal
means
no one can replace their home. Captivating Change the verb form
mean
Correct your spelling
anyone
any one
means violence or curtailing the freedom of Correct your spelling
anyone
life
. So I strongly disagree with the notion of zoos
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
