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Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster means of public transport. Some others think that there are important priorities(e.g.cost, environment). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #transport #priorities #e #g #cost #environment
Any of the
country
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 needs any progress overall main priorities that the
government
 essentially work. Here, some people believe that the
nation
 needs to pay more attention towards the
transport
 system while few
belive
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believe
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 that there
are
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is
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 so many important and necessary work which are pending to do by the authority. Here, I will illustrate
the
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both of the views. On the one hand , some individuals opine that public
transport
 is a major part to get mandatory changes and improvements because people get
theirs
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their
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 jobs and some other places via public
transport
 when they are unable to afford their own vehicles.
Moreover
, public transportation is a good source of contribution in any of the country economy so the
nation
give
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 much preferred to get apply public
transport
 or lure the public to get more use of them.
On the other hand
, some people think that the world is facing
lot
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 of more serious issues so the
government
 should give more prior to
these kind
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this kind
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 of works
for
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,for
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 instance, pollution, unemployment and health
isssues
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issues
 which are increasing day by day so to get rid of them , the
government
 should take appropriate steps.
Furthermore
, study or education is
foundation
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the foundation
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 of any of the
nation
's future generations
consequently
 the
government
 needs to spend a big amount on these facilities to provide to the
nation
. Overall, it can be observed that there are so many things which should need amendments while public
transport
 is one of them as well.
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