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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.
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The chart gives some data about (the degrees) of pollution types which causes
according to
 various reasons in Japan,
America
, China,
Australia
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and Australia
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 in 2021. These causes were illustrated like
transport
,
electricity
generation
 and
industry
.
Overall
, units are measured in
PPM
. The high rate of pollution was shown in China and in
industry
,
in
contrast
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,contrast
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 the least show belonged to
Australia
. With regards to China and
America
, generally, the shows of
industry
 and
transport
 were relatively similar (80
PPM
 and 70
PPM
),
in
addition
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,addition
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 the minimum level belonged to
electricity
generation
 with just under 60
PPM
 and
this
 statistic was closer to the
transport
 in
America
.
Finallly
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Finally
, the top level was shown in
America
 in
the
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apply
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transport
 with just under 60
PPM
, on the one
hand
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,hand
show examples
 the pointers of
electricity
generation
 and
industry
 were closer similar (30
PPM
 and just down 30
PPM
). In terms of
Australia
 and Japan, most of all were appreciated in Japan in
dustry
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industry
 almost just above 40
PPM
,
on the
contrary
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,contrary
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 the pointer occurred in
electricity
generation
 approximately just above 10
PPM
.
Finally
, the pointers of
Australia
 were closer to each other,
nevertheless
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,nevertheless
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 the indexes of
transport
 and
industry
 levelled off with approximately more than 10
PPM
 and the other was just under 20
PPM
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, australia, transport, electricity, generation, industry, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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