Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people have said that the most common environmental issue nowadays is the loss of the endangered
species
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of plants and animals.
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, some people have said that there are more serious environmental
problems
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. I will discuss my view of points and my own understanding regarding the topic
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the following statements. According to the environmental research of the Department of Environment and Natural Resources, the loss of some endangered
species
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of both plants and animals is alarming nowadays and it needs a solution to resolve
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problem.
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,
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will cause a serious impact
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our mother nature to balance our ecosystem. As a matter of fact, if our ecosystem is not balanced, there will be a lot of chances to create natural calamities.
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, lack of plant
species
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along the
river side
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riverside
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can cause soil
erusion
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erosion
, dying polar bears in
Atlantic
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the Atlantic
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region can cause ice melting. These
problems
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can be managed if our government will impose awareness
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of
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how to take care of them.
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, aside from
aforementioned
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issue we
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have a lot of environmental
problems
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to focus on.
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, air pollution
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is
very
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popular and common problem especially in cities and rural areas.
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is the proper waste disposal caused by
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a human
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being
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beings
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and
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usually leads to unbearable floods. And
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lastly
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the
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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effect
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is very rampant that have caused
the
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severe global warming recently. To conclude, we have a lot of environmental issues nowadays but the most serious one is the loss of the endangered
species
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of plants and animals.
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, we
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have to focus on the other
problems
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like air pollution, proper waste disposal and
green house
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greenhouse
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effect because
it
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we
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also
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need
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a solution to take care of our nature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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