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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In these decades, technologies are improved a lot
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 manner, especially in social communication. The Majority of
people
 think that modernization would make us
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connect socially. While, some
people
 believe that, raise in technology will lead to an independent life. In
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 opinion and try to draw a conclusion.
Firstly
, the way of communication become
more
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easier in these days. Most of the
people
 argued that these kinds of development could be more helpful for everyone, particularly, long relations.
In addition
 to that, the immigrants and foreign students are highly benefited with
this
 technologies, because they can easily share their ideas and knowledge, which make a healthy collaboration with each other.
For example
, the best social media application called Linkedin has millions of users who are connected in their specific profession.
However
, someone opposed
this
 modern world, they believe that there are lots of drawbacks
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this
.
Furthermore
, the students and youngsters become separated from their families and friends by spending a high amount of time on social media, which leads to an independent society. To clarify,
people
 used to visit each other in person on almost all occasions, but now the rate of visits has declined sharply,
as a result
, they have become more independent and less connected. To conclude, technological evolution should be encouraged. But, everyone should aware of the cons and use
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 properly. It is our responsibility to balance our lifestyle in
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 possible manner.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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