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Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe that it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #future #waste #time #focus
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The given two
map
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maps
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 explains access to a
city
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 hospital through different routes in the years 2007 and 2010. Overall, it can be depicted that the Eastern and the Southern side of the area faced major changes, while no changes were observed
in
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 the Northern side. As can be seen in the diagram, in the year 2007 there were only two ways to reach the
city
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 hospital. The one route was to travel through the hospital road which was surrounded
with
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by
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 six bus stops and the other was from the parking area for
public
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the public
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 and staff which was on the eastern side of hospital road.
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, in the year 2010 three major routes were developed which were a bus station, staff car park, public parking. The bus stops were replaced with the construction of two roundabouts which were near
to
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the
city
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 hospital and near the
city
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 road.
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