The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
The first bar chart illustrates the number of
Japanese
tourists
traveling
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overseas, (meanwhile) the line charts
shows
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the percentage of
Japanese
visitors that travel to
Australia
which both
of
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charts showed the data between 1985 and 1995.
Overall
, there was a gradual increase
of
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the figure for
Japanese
voyagers that explored other countries during a decade, except in 1991 which decreased slightly. The majority of them
traveled
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travelled
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to
Australia
in 1993. In the initial
year
, there were 5
millions
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million
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Japanese
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who
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traveled
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travelling
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abroad.
This
figure increased steadily until the
year
of
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1990.
However
, there was a slight decline in
a
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the
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year
after which only reached around 10.5
millions
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million
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(1990) before going back to climb significantly throughout the
year
, and successfully reached the peak in 1995 (15
millions
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million
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). There was around 2% of
Japanese
that travel to
Australia
in 1985 and
started
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this started
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to climb considerably
after
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10 years later.
Although
, the percentage of
Japanese
tourists in
Australia
was fell
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fell
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in 1989 and 1994 .
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