The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
The first bar chart illustrates the number of
Japanese
tourists traveling
overseas, (meanwhile) the line charts Change the spelling
travelling
shows
the percentage of Change the verb form
show
Japanese
visitors that travel to Australia
which both of
charts showed the data between 1985 and 1995.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, there was a gradual increase of
the figure for Change preposition
in
Japanese
voyagers that explored other countries during a decade, except in 1991 which decreased slightly. The majority of them traveled
to Change the spelling
travelled
Australia
in 1993.
In the initial year
, there were 5 millions
Change to singular
million
Japanese
Correct pronoun usage
who
traveled
abroad. Wrong verb form
travelling
This
figure increased steadily until the year
of
1990. Change preposition
apply
However
, there was a slight decline in a
Correct article usage
the
year
after which only reached around 10.5 millions
(1990) before going back to climb significantly throughout the Change to singular
million
year
, and successfully reached the peak in 1995 (15 millions
).
There was around 2% of Change to singular
million
Japanese
that travel to Australia
in 1985 and started
to climb considerably Correct pronoun usage
this started
after
10 years later. Change preposition
apply
Although
, the percentage of Japanese
tourists in Australia
was fell
in 1989 and 1994 .Change the verb form
fell
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