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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that it is pointless to spend time on the
protection
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 of wild
animals
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 because we
humans
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 have no place to live and no need for them. I completely disagree with
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 point of view. In my opinion, it is certain to argue that wild
animals
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 have no place in the 21st century. I do not believe that
plant
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planet
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 Earth exists only for the benefit of
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, and there is nothing special about
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 century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species.
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, there is no reason why we should let wild
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 die out. We do not need to destroy everything except for
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 and only exist some things which are be needed by
humans
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.
Humans
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 and wild
animals
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 will exist together on Earth or in the same place rather than only
humans
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 or
animals
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 exist. I
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 disagree with the idea that protecting
animals
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 is a waste of resources. It is usually the
protection
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 of natural habitats that ensure the survival of wild
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, and most scientists agree that these habitats are
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 part of what people live in.
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, some people think that
protection
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 projects will spend a lot of money on wild
animals
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, but if these
animals
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 die out or disappear that means we
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 only
have
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 not
any
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 food to eat but
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 the environment will change.
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, it will cause global warming and unusual climate situations. In conclusion, I believe that we should spend some money on the
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 of wild
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.
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humans
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 and wild
animals
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 should exist together to live on Earth.
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