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Many students find it difficult to focus a pay attention at school now a days. What are the reasons for this ?what can be done to solve the problem what are the reasons for this?

#students #focus #pay #attention #school
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Education plays a vital role in establishing a constructive society.
Now a days
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student
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the student
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 finds it complicated to concentrate at the
schools
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 which leads to devastating consequences. The Following essay will highlight some of the causes of
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 problem
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 corresponding solutions. One of the major
obstacle
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 in establishing focus in school is the existence of Technology around us. Today's generation unfortunately it is addicted to technological devices. In a way or
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, we are continuously using gadgets. The invention of tools like
smart watches
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 etc
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 made the scenario worst. To tackle the situation, rules and regulations must be
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 insurance
schools
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 are gadgets free. According to a
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 conducted in North Australia
schools
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which
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 prohibited the entry of electronic devices had better academic results than those in which
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 items were permitted. Another area of focus is the poor sleeping and eating habits in which today's beings are involved. These days the trend of being
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owl
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 and consuming and healthy food is escalating at
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exponential
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 rate. Children today go to bed late
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 and rise early for school which result in
lack
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 of proper sleep. Along with
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 our Diet presently is unhygienic and nutritionless. An immediate
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counter measure
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 for
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 issue is essential. A possible remedy is the
parents
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involvement
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 to ensure their offsprings intake healthy food and get full night sleep.
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 important reason is the traditional schooling methods. According to a survey ,70% of
schools
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 in Sydney preach knowledge using old methodology by reading books and writing on
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white boards
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. At present times, it is evitable for teachers to experiment
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 ways of teaching
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 as educational plays,presentations etc. To reckon up the notion, issues like technological interference, traditional teaching methods and poor Lifestyle leads to lack of attention at school. Appropriate counter actions like enforcing
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 policies, change in Lifestyle and new learning phenomenons can help us to Limitate the problem.
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