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Nuclear energy is better than other sources of energy for meeting the ever-increasing global energy need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years,
power
 consumption is increasing day by day due to the increase in the human population.
However
, many people think that nuclear
energy
 is the greater way to
fulfill
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 the rising
energy
 demands than the different available resources. I quarrel with the given statement to a larger extent and believe that there are other effective resources are available that can meet the need for
energy
 for the public. In today’s world, there are many scientific technologies available to produce
energy
such
 as bio-
energy
, wind
energy
, solar
energy
, and wave
energy
. These methods of
energy
 are
also
 known as clean
energy
 which means
this
 kind of
energy
 never harms the atmosphere as well pollutes the air.
However
, for producing nuclear
power
energy
 lots of clean water is needed and
also
 it spreads harmful gases into the lower atmosphere. Due to
this
, the earth's temperature rises to a certain level. Another reason for disagreement with
this
 statement is that the nuclear
energy
-producing method contains a higher risk in itself due to toxic elements like Uranium.
For example
, the biggest tragedy in the nuclear
power
 industry was the “Chernobyl” powerplant blast in Russia. After
this
 blast, many people were died due to radioactive elements.
Also
,
this
 method is very expensive and needs a big amount of budget to build as well run the entire powerplant. On the other side, nuclear
energy
 is a very effective method to produce
energy
 in a larger amount. The other
energy
 sources can be affected by environmental conditions but, they cannot affect nuclear powerplant. In conclusion,
although
 there
some
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 plus points of nuclear
energy
 which cannot
inevitable
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 but, only nuclear
energy
 is not sufficient for enriching the need for
power
 in the entire world. The other kind of
energy
 is
also
 needed which is
also
 a better option in comparison to nuclear
power
.
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