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In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, there is a growing debate among
people
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 about the future of
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, one group of
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 opines that we need to spend more
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 for understanding different
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planet
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planets
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 like Mars. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 of that I agree with the use of
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money
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 for the protection of
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, there are many possibilities we can live our
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 without spending
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 for migrating
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another planet
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planet
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, reduce carbon emission and industrial chemicals in our water bodies,air and soils,
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 of
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 can contribute
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 conventional level of industrial practice to reduce pollutions.
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,stop using chemical pesticides and wild forest for making agricultural activities, it
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 adequate environmental destruction.
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, control all
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 of harmful
equipments
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equipment
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 that produces CFC in our atmosphere because it will cause cracks in our ozone layers.
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examample
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, WHO 2015 environmental protection protocol suggested that buildings and electronic
device
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devices
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 cost 55% of ozone depletion since the year 1998 so the law recommended minimising all these things from human
life
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 for the future existence of
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earth
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 is an opportunity to reduce expensive intakes for shifting human
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 in
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 world. Admittedly, it is visible that these controlling measures cannot fully
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 the needs of
people
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 Reportedly, in
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 growing population needs drinking water, air and food for surviving.
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,
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will arise
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 about shifting
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in
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 another
planet
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 .
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, still now researchers searching for a
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is
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same
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like
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earth
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 but they don't have any proper answer for
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, if they find any
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instead
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 it will be more
challengeable
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 and expensive. To illustrate
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, NASA American space centre soon will start Mars mission, whereas the selected
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 planning to migrate over there.
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,
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 mission is very expensive and at the same time dangerous because they have to store all their living necessary items until their death to survive
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 atmosphere of Mars In conclusion, our
planet
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earth
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 is the gift and most valuable source of human
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 that means we can't replace it with others. In my view, protect the beauty of
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earth
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 and spend
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money
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 for the development of
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 and restore the natural habitat.
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