In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, there is a growing debate among
people
about the future of
earth
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.
However
, one group of
people
opines that we need to spend more
money
for understanding different
planet
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like Mars. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
statement
instead
of that I agree with the use of
this
money
for the protection of
earth
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.
To begin
, there are many possibilities we can live our
earth
without spending
money
for migrating
other
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planet
.
Firstly
, reduce carbon emission and industrial chemicals in our water bodies,air and soils,
instead
of
this
people
can contribute
more
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conventional level of industrial practice to reduce pollutions.
Secondly
,stop using chemical pesticides and wild forest for making agricultural activities, it
mitigate
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adequate environmental destruction.
Thirdly
, control all
kind
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of harmful
equipments
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that produces CFC in our atmosphere because it will cause cracks in our ozone layers.
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, WHO 2015 environmental protection protocol suggested that buildings and electronic
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cost 55% of ozone depletion since the year 1998 so the law recommended minimising all these things from human
life
for the future existence of
earth
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.
This
is an opportunity to reduce expensive intakes for shifting human
life
in
other
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world. Admittedly, it is visible that these controlling measures cannot fully
fulfill
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the needs of
people
Reportedly, in
future
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growing population needs drinking water, air and food for surviving.
Hence
,
it
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will arise
a questions
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about shifting
life
in
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another
planet
.
Consequently
, still now researchers searching for a
planet
is
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same
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like
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earth
but they don't have any proper answer for
this
.
In addition
, if they find any
planet
instead
it will be more
challengeable
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and expensive. To illustrate
this
, NASA American space centre soon will start Mars mission, whereas the selected
people
planning to migrate over there.
On the other hand
,
this
mission is very expensive and at the same time dangerous because they have to store all their living necessary items until their death to survive
unstable
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atmosphere of Mars In conclusion, our
planet
earth
is the gift and most valuable source of human
life
that means we can't replace it with others. In my view, protect the beauty of
earth
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and spend
this
money
for the development of
people
and restore the natural habitat.
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