More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

The
number
of
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pupil
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leaving the agriculture occupation and relocating the cities
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increasing day by day. There can be severe consequences of
this
migration which
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will discuss point by point in
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essay.
First
, if the
number
of individuals leaving
farming
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the farming
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sector keeps on escalating
this
much,
then
there will be
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shortage of the basic food
esstentials
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essentials
. As we are already aware of population shoot-up year by year, if people will leave growing wheat,rice and other basic food essentials,
then
with
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of time, there will be food scarcity in
country
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the country
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.
Second
, It will lead to
immense
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increase in the population of
city
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the city
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. As the
number of
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supply of essentials to
city
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the city
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is limited, it will lead to
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a surge
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in the price of basic necessities and will lead to exhaust of basic health facilities.
Third
, if a large
number
of people will reside in cities,
then
there will be
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when there will be no jobs available which will lead to
increase
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in
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate in the city.
This
might leads to
increase
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in criminal activities. The solution to
this
issuse
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issue
is that an individual generally
migrate
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generally in search of better job opportunities and living conditions. If we will provide
better
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price of the crop to the farmers
then
they won't leave their occupation. And, if we ensure to improve educational and health
facilites
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facilities
in rural areas, it will eradicate the reason of migration due to the welfare of kids.
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