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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantage?

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 believe that a few years later almost all vehicles will be changed to no driver
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 and it will be possible all
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 passengers. It seems to me that the advantages of
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
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 demonstrate that an efficient allocation
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 and no driving accident would be occurred, followed by an analysis of the primary disadvantage, named distract of practical direct decision. The main advantage of driverless cars is a good allocation
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 means that without human interaction
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 would manage the traffic
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, perfectly.
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 may lead to no traffic congestion, even peak time of the usage of roads. Another possible option would be perfect public transports and taxi service because
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 not necessarily
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 own
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. The perfect driverless road
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 operates all vehicles, efficiently.
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, if there were no human intervention drivers, there would be no more
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accidents
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. A recent survey by Cambridge University found that
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accidents
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 of human influence accounted for about 80
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 of the total
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.
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 to say that drivers are a key factor in
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. Those opposed to
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 said that computerized cars may not make the right decisions when
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 occur suddenly, but
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 can perform the right decisions in a very short time.
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,
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 sudden accident does not occur usually. In summary, driverless vehicles may bring a lot of advantages and possibilities
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, consumption of own
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 and no more
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 I mentioned above. These welcome developments outweigh the flawed argument.
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