Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, the most debated point among the
people
of
society
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the society
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is whether to share
information
or not about various fields of
economy
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the economy
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such
as science, commerce and education. A part of the
society
is believes
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that as much
information
should be yielded while others think that some
data
are too worthy to be shared.
As of
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my opinion,
information
should be shared with as many
people
as possible but not in
such
a way that sensitive
data
is provided.
Firstly
,
majority
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the majority
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of the
people
believe that they should be accessible to various
information
about the field of scientific research, business and education. Certainly,
this
will remove the imbalance between the sections of
society
and
also
be a reason for the development, by getting free
access
to tips and tricks about starting a business a small businessman can develop his firm.
On the other hand
, free
access
of
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education can benefit the children of underprivileged
people
of
society
.
Moreover
, if the public has
access
to
the
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scientific research there are chances that it can be developed more.
For example
, the theory of relativity by Albert Einstein is studied in almost every school there are chances that the future physicist can develop
this
theory by eliminating the limitation of the theory.
Secondly
, the
information
should be accessible to
people
in
such
a way that it does not include confidential
information
,
also
if more than
required
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information
is provided
then
it will affect
the
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security.
For instance
, the
information
about nuclear science and
defence
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the defence
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sector
it
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is
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extremely sensitive
therefore
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, the
data
about it should not be disclosed as it will affect the safety of the nation. To summarize, though
access
of
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information
about
various
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the various
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sector
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is important
but
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due care should be taken that confidential
data
is not shared.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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