People can live and work anywhere they want to choose because of improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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the significant development in the communication sector and the transportation department has changed the way of living
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makes it easy to do jobs and stay at
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which ever
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location they feel comfortable the advantages definitely overweigh the disadvantages in the following paragraph I'll share my explanations with my opinions.
Firstly
it is very important to communicate in your daily life either it is with family or job purpose in
this
generation it has become simple to talk with their parents or kids from different locations through mobile phones,
mails
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and social media in the work time passing important information can be kept confidential by talking on interlinked landlines at office
furthermore
commuuncating
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communicating
can be done much faster
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in the past while using letters it would take
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destination
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but now can do it in minutes.
Secondly
moving from one place to
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an other
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whenever they need in a cheap and efficient way is a luxury which majority and society can experience education and finding a work which they are comfortable with would be hard if they cannot afford the
transport
however
in
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situation there are many means of
transport
like railways and motor vehicles which helps them to travel to the different places in a very limited amount of time
for example
in the old
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it could take
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to more hundreds and
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now we can do within hours.
On the other hand
inevitable that the drastic changes usage of vehicles causes serious issues
such
as traffic
conjunstion
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congestion
conjunction
and pollution human beings use there use own vehicles or public
transport
to travel but they emit some dangerous chemicals to air which causes the damage to
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To conclude it is important to have
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advanced means of communication and
transport
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life but controlling the consequences caused by
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improvements should
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be taken into consideration and take
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