Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

Obesity is becoming
a
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main issue of chronic diseases.
Therefore
, the individual, nowadays,
use
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different measures to get rid of extra
weight
by following a special diet pattern and performing exercises on the daily basis.
However
, I think that it is not enough and individuals need to change
food
habits as well as today's lifestyle to get frequent results. No doubt,
special
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diet pattern includes all ingredients
such
as carbohydrates, protein and
specially
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fat
in
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appropriate
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amount, which helps the person to reduce
weight
.
However
, one should
also
need to avoid poor
food
habits.
For instance
, many youngsters consult dieticians for a special
food
plan but even after that eat fast
food
.
Thus
, individuals should stick to
special
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diet plan to get better results.
Moreover
, the sedentary lifestyle is
also
a reason behind gaining
weight
. Most
of
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the
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people have hectic schedules and have no time for physical activities. But in order to lose
weight
person
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should consider physical activity as
necessary
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part of the day. Having
a
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exercise partner and
by
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joining the special clubs of exercise are
a
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excellent
way
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to get the body back into shape. To conclude, these days numerous ways are used by people to maintain
body
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the body
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. In my mind, special
food
habits, routine exercise and
change
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in lifestyle all are essential components to lose
weight
.
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