Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

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Obesity is becoming

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main issue of chronic diseases.

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, the individual, nowadays,

use

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different measures to get rid of extra

weight

by following a special diet pattern and performing exercises on the daily basis.

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, I think that it is not enough and individuals need to change

food

habits as well as today's lifestyle to get frequent results. No doubt,

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diet pattern includes all ingredients

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fat

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appropriate

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amount, which helps the person to reduce

weight

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, one should

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need to avoid poor

food

habits.

For instance

, many youngsters consult dieticians for a special

food

plan but even after that eat fast

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, individuals should stick to

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diet plan to get better results.

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, the sedentary lifestyle is

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weight

. Most

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the

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people have hectic schedules and have no time for physical activities. But in order to lose

weight

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should consider physical activity as

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part of the day. Having

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exercise partner and

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joining the special clubs of exercise are

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excellent

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to get the body back into shape. To conclude, these days numerous ways are used by people to maintain

body

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. In my mind, special

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habits, routine exercise and

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in lifestyle all are essential components to lose

weight

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Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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Historical objects in museums all over the world should be returned to their country of origin. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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