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People can live and work anywhere they want to choose because of improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays the significant development in the communication sector and the transportation department has changed the way of living
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 makes it easy to do jobs and stay at whichever location they feel comfortable the advantages definitely overweigh the disadvantages in the following paragraph I'll share my explanations with my opinions.
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 it is very important to communicate in your daily life either it is with family or job purpose in
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 generation it has become simple to talk with their parents or kids from different locations through mobile phones,emails and social media in the work time passing important information can be kept confidential by talking on interlinked landlines at office
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 communicating can be done much faster
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 in the past while using letters it would take days to reach its a destination but now can do it in minutes.
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 moving from one place to another whenever they need in a cheap and efficient way is a luxury which majority and society can experience education and finding a work which they are comfortable with would be hard if they cannot afford the
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 in the present situation there are many means of
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 like railways and motor vehicles which helps them to travel to the different places in a very limited amount of time
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 in the old days it could take days to more hundreds and kilometres now we can do within hours.
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 inevitable that the drastic changes usage of vehicles causes serious issues
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 as traffic congestion and pollution human beings use there use own vehicles or public
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 to travel but they emit some dangerous chemicals to air which causes the damage to the environment To conclude it is important to have
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 advanced means of communication and
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 for a better life but controlling the consequences caused by these improvements should
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 be taken into consideration and take preventive measures
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