Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
There are different attitudes towards making
mistakes
. Whether or not parents should give sufficient freedom for children
to make mistakes
has been a hot topic. Both side
of the argument will be discussed in Change to a plural noun
sides
this
essay before an appropriate conclusion is given.
Firstly
, what the opposing side of the debate is always arguing is that preventing children
from making mistakes
will shape them to be more self-disciplined. For example
, a friend of mine, who was taught to avoid mistakes
in every aspect of life, has a very high standard for herself. What is more, she always makes detailed plans and carefully checks her work before submitting
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itsubmitting
Therefore
, children
who were told not to make mistakes
may be more likely to make academic achievements, like what she does in schoolwork.
Controversially, it could also
be argued that parents should allow children
to make some mistakes
so that children
can be more self-esteemed, which is the point that I tent
to believe. Using myself as an example, I was told not to be afraid of Correct your spelling
tend
mistakes
when I was very young. Thus
, I became quite brave and confident expressing
my own ideas. Change preposition
in expressing
Moreover
, I am always enthusiastic in
challenging myself, which allows me to make progress from time to time. Change preposition
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Hence
, it is supported that children
who are encouraged not to fear mistakes
tend to be bolder and more confident.
In conclusion, both allowing and discouraging children
to make mistakes
could have benefits in their development. However
, I tend to believe that parents should encourage children
not to be afraid of making mistakes
,
since Remove the comma
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children
who was
brought up in Change the verb form
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this
way will have better performance when confronting challenges. Furthermore
, I think making mistakes
will become more acceptable in the future.Submitted by xjwchineseteacher on
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