Some people argue that government should spend on their money elderly people care. However, other people say that government should focus more education for young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that every country should invest their funds wisely.
While
some believe that it is vital to take care of the state's retired personnel, I would argue that training, and educating young people is imperative to a country's economic welfare.
To begin
with, those who believe the healthcare needs of the aged community should be invested in
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might argue that these citizens have served their society well, and
therefore
their well-being should not be compromised.
Moreover
, It is strenuous for elderly people to take care of their own health.
For instance
, an old person with a wheelchair might not be able to drive to a hospital by themselves in case of an emergency, an ambulance should be provided by the healthcare authorities for
this
.
In contrast
, If the management did not disburse any cash for the elderly, their life expectancy would definitely decline.
On the other hand
, It is indispensable to provide capital for
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education to boost a society's economy.
This
is because, better schooling and training will provide an ample amount of opportunities
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youngsters to start their own
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, leading to more job opportunities. To illustrate, growth in employment would lead to additional tax collected by the government.
For instance
, if India hadn't spent enough money to establish high-quality universities for engineering, many technology start-ups would not have emerged out of
this
nation. In conclusion,
although
investment in elderly care is important
due to
the service provided by them to society I strongly believe that without focusing on teenager's education and schooling, the nation's financial state can not grow.
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