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You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue into late into the night. Write a letter to your elderly neighbour. In your letter: — explain what will be happening — offer your apologies in advance —  invite him/her to join the celebration

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Dear Mr Johnson! I am writing to inform you that I am arranging a
party
this
 Saturday, which will probably
last
 until late at night. The event is dedicated to my graduation, so over 50
of
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other students are invited. We will spend time outdoors
making
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having
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barbecue
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a barbecue
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,
therefore
, I am afraid that some
noice
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noise
notice
 might occur. I am aware that you appreciate silence and the comfort of solitude,
that is
 why I am sending my apologies to you in advance. I am truly sorry that the
party
 might cause you inconvenience.
However
, I am hoping you can understand that graduation is a once-in-a-lifetime event, which I regard as a crucial milestone in my life, so the
party
 is of great importance to me. I promise that no other loud gatherings will be held
this
 year in my place. As an apology, I would appreciate
if
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 you could join the
party
 and share the moment with my friends and me. The
party
 starts at 6 pm, and you can come whenever it is appropriate for you. Anyway, I would save the best piece of the
party
 pie for you. I am looking forward to seeing you. Best wishes, Anna
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General advice
To further enhance your letter, consider varying your sentence structure and vocabulary to enrich the text. This would help in manifesting a more dynamic and engaging tone.
Spelling
For a minor improvement, make sure all references to 'noice' are corrected to 'noise'. Small spelling errors can slightly distract, but your message remains clear and impactful.
Structure
The structure of your letter was logical, starting with the explanation of the event, followed by an apology and an invitation, which made it easy to follow.
Task Response
You have shown a good understanding of the task by covering all required points: explaining the event, offering apologies, and extending an invitation.
Tone
The tone of your letter is suitably polite and considerate, acknowledging the neighbor's preference for quiet while inviting him to join the celebration, which demonstrates excellent social tact.
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