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Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is often argued that the unemployed individuals who receive benefits from the country
authoriries
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authorities
 should
volunteer
 to give back to the
society
 they live in. I would like to agree with
this
 statement and my essay will discuss the reasons why
this
 is necessary.
Firstly
, I believe that unemployment can affect an individual in a negative manner, making them more lethargic and lazy. Since they receive regular aid from the government, they choose to continue doing nothing rather than putting their efforts towards a noble cause.
Furthermore
, some people
tend
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 engage themselves in malpractices
such
 as drugs and even participate in criminal activities to pass their free time.
This
 situation tends to affect their families and neighbourhood
imensely
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immensely
.
Secondly
, it is seen that if an individual decides to
volunteer
 to serve the community by giving back, it benefits both, the person as well as the
society
, for the better. By stepping forward, one can, eventually, build additional skill sets which can be of advantage to them for any future job opportunities. Having occupied in doing some work or the other will
further
 motivate them to search for any potential jobs.
For example
, people who are engaged in
volunteer
 activities tend to grow as an individual and become a better human. To conclude, the unemployed
receining
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receiving
 government
assisatnce
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assistance
 should
volunteer
 to serve
the
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society
. I believe that volunteering not only helps build a responsible human but at the same time reduce crime in
the
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society
.
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