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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is sometimes argued that spending money on railways by governments is more beneficial than
roads
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. While I agree with
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 idea, I think that
roads
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 shouldn’t be ignored because they are important too. There are several reasons why I agree with getting more budget on railways rather than
roads
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.
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,
trains
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 have more space and so they can transfer more people as compared with cars or even buses.
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, there are just 4 seats in a
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 or 42 in a bus, but
trains
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 have more than 100 seats.
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, using
trains
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 can help to decrease the traffic jam and
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, it can lead to a reduction of air pollution in the cities caused by CO2 emissions. We create carbon dioxide emissions every time we drive a
car
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 and it lasts around a century in the atmosphere. If we use
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 of four-wheel-drive cars, we may have less polluted air, particularly in winters.
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, we need safe
roads
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 too and they shouldn’t be abandoned by governments. Sometimes people prefer to travel by their
car
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 to have more privacy or they do have not enough time and they need to get to their destination as soon as possible. If the
roads
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 aren’t safe enough to drive in, there would be an increase in
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 accidents which is a disaster.
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, accessibility by cars to some areas is easier than by
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. Some rural places do not have train stations
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 people are more comfortable driving a
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 to get there. In conclusion, I believe that
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 spending money on railways has more environmental advantages, but governments shouldn’t ignore the safety of
roads
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 and consider a budget for them too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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