IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source #majority
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In the midst of
this
Linking Words
 technology-driven global world,
Use synonyms
internet
Add an article
the internet
show examples
 plays an important role in everyone's life. Nowadays, an increasing number of individuals depends on
Use synonyms
internet
Add an article
the internet
show examples
 for reading
news
Use synonyms
,
however
Linking Words
, the majority of
people
Use synonyms
 rely on traditional
newspapers
Use synonyms
 for reading
news
Use synonyms
. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
Linking Words
 view, and I think more and more
people
Use synonyms
 are moving to technology-based
news
Use synonyms
 providers because of its advantages like accessibility, convenience, etc.
Firstly
Linking Words
, receiving information early is very important for the majority of
people
Use synonyms
 and
Use synonyms
internet
Correct article usage
the internet
show examples
 plays a vital role in it. All
Use synonyms
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
newspapers
Use synonyms
 or online
news
Use synonyms
applications
Use synonyms
 are able to deliver
news
Use synonyms
 quickly,
however
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
 who depend on the
newspapers
Use synonyms
 have to wait for many hours to receive their copy, but by that time the importance of
news
Use synonyms
 may be over. Many
people
Use synonyms
 working in the stock market, banking, tourism or sales rely on early information to plan their business, for those
people
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
news
Use synonyms
 media are the saviours, whereas professionals who depend on the normal newspaper may not be competitive due to the slow information gathering.
In addition
Linking Words
 to the above, technology-based
news
Use synonyms
 and
applications
Use synonyms
 are more convenient compared to daily journals. Reding standard
newspapers
Use synonyms
 from a train or bus may cause inconvenience to co-passengers, whereas if someone read
news
Use synonyms
 from his mobile cannot cause any issue to others.
Additionally
Linking Words
, if someone has to purchase a newspaper, they have to visit a shop or newspaper booth, but
people
Use synonyms
 can access
Use synonyms
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
news
Use synonyms
 at their fingertips with the help of an
Use synonyms
internet enabled
Add a hyphen
internet-enabled
show examples
 computer or mobile device.
Finally
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
 can easily read
news
Use synonyms
 based on their interest in
Use synonyms
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
applications
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, a person only interested in sports or economics can directly read only
this
Linking Words
news
Use synonyms
 from the websites dedicatedly hosting
such
Linking Words
 data. In conclusion, as explained above there are many advantages for
Use synonyms
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
news
Use synonyms
 websites and
applications
Use synonyms
 compared to traditional
newspapers
Use synonyms
. Because of these cutting edge benefits, I totally believe
Use synonyms
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
news
Use synonyms
 is more beneficial compared to daily
newspapers
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by dileepjosed on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: