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With the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas？

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The demand for
energy
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 sources of oil and gas is continually rising.
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, it is a fact that fossil
fuels
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 have already reached an alarming rate. Some organizations suggest that
people
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 should develop
energy
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 sources and collect fossil
fuels
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 in remote sand unreached land.
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, it will be harmful to the world and human beings if
people
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 consider
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 advice. On the one hand,
people
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 will confront unknown risks when searching for
energy
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 in untouched natural places. The cost will be unevaluated due to unaware threat.
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,
this
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 action may cause local climate change that will impact on global climate.
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, the ability of humans in researching the deep sea is equivalent to that in studying the Moon. No surprise, there will be uncountable problems in developing facilities for undersea
fuels
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 mining. What's more, the South Pole is covered by glaciers, which will cause a rising in sea level if
people
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 collect fossil
fuels
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 unproperly.
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, even we can collect more
energy
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 from undeveloped natural places. There will be a problem in the scramble for resources as well.
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 the supplement of resources increased, under the circumstance that most
energy
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 forms are unsustainable, the need for
energy
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 will not decrease. War in the middle east is a typical instance of the scramble for crude oil. In some regions without sovereign rights, these kinds of contentions could be even more fierce. In conclusion, the extent of risks outweighs the profits that come from developing remote and unreached places. Even nowadays, the technology is not stable enough that can avoid all kinds of difficulties.
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, it will
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 cause issues in resource scrambling.
People
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 should find a way to develop sustainably, scientists and researchers should work together in developing revolutionary
energy
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 sources.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy sources
  • industrial growth and development
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • revenues
  • technological advancements
  • extraction process
  • biodiversity
  • natural habitats
  • indigenous communities
  • displacement
  • traditional way of life
  • environmental disasters
  • oil spills
  • long-lasting effects
  • widespread effects
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