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Today quality of life in cities is decreased .discuss the causes and solutions

#quality #life #cities
The current standards of
life
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living
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 in urban
areas
 is reduced.
This
 essay is going to elaborate on reasons for reduced
quality
 of
life
 in cities and provide solutions.
First
 of all,the heavy presence of pollution in towns is increased which has led to
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
quality
 of air that
people
 breath and
quality
 of water that city residence drink. To illustrate
this
, several industries release toxic emissions which when inhaled are harmful to
individuals
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an individuals
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 health.
Moreover
, when toxic
discharge
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discharges
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 are found in
water
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the water
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 they
also
 cause illness.
Furthermore
, the congestion experienced in urban
areas
 has led to
people
 scrambling over
few
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a few
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resource
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resources
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 resulting in immersed episodes of theft among city
residence
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residents
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.
Thus
,the
quality
 of
life
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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is reduced significantly.
On the other hand
, solutions can be identified to solve the issue of industrial emissions through enforcing laws and regulations by the existing authority so that industries can treat their wastes before releasing them to air and water respectively.Another solution is to properly
decongesting
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decongest
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town
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towns
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 by advocating for
urban rural
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urban-rural
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 migration
that is
people
 are empowered to stay in their rural homes since
standard
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the standard
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 of
environment
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the environment
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 is
fevourable
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favourable
 and no need of scrambling over the few resources because they are plenty.
Therefore
 ,
people
 can make ends meet even in rural
areas
. To conclude,
life
 could be harsh in urban
areas
 in terms of pollution and insecurities but with proper government involvement in the control of both emissions and enforcement of
law
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,law
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people
 can
co-exit
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co-exist
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 in urban
areas
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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