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Giving Detail information of Crime in Newspaper and on television has bad consequences, some suggest that government should impose some restriction on them. What extent you agree or disagree?

#detail #information #crime #newspaper #television #consequences #suggest #government #restriction
In recent times crime
rate
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 have escalated beyond
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 limit. There is a school of thought who thinks that
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providing every
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 of
offenses
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offences
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 in
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or television can lead to adverse situations. Some people have given
opinion
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the opinion
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 that government should apply some rules on that. I agree with
this
 thought
completly
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completely
 and I will shed my views in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, doing any unlawful act always pushes you to bad situations. As the law has always been superior to
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. Sometimes people think that they will escape from their bad doings but it is impossible to beat the law.
To begin
 with, newspaper and television always
keeps
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 us updated.
For instance
, it provides us
information
 about
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, sports, entertainment and crime as well. Many times it happens that media gives every inch of
information
 about crimes. In
such
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cases
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case
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 it gives
advantage
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an advantage
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 to criminals to find a
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loophole
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loop hole
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loophole
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 or a way to escape from doing that same act. Sometimes it
also
 creates chaos in society as some of the
deatils
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details
 are horrifying.
However
,
such
 news keeps you alert so that you can not be a victim of
such
 acts but at
same
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 time it
also
impose
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a
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fear in people to trust a fellow person in society. Not only that sometimes
this
 media becomes bias with their
information
 and
instead
 of being neutral they start to provide judgements on
thier
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their
 own before any official authorities
,
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Also
 many times details of
such
 events are not as accurate too.
Therefore
 government should create
such
body
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who
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that
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 varifies
such
information
 and create guidelines to publish these details
upto
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up to
such
extent
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. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion that
official
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 administrative body should always
keeps
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eyes
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 on
such
 media. Not only that public should not belives
such
 details without
clarify
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 them.
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