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The street where you live is in poor condition. Write a letter to local City Council in your letter you Explain the situation Explain the likely consequence Describe the change you expect to occur

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention that our area is not in
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good condition so requesting
for
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the repair of our streets In our locality
st john
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St John Street
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street
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 is very old one, the
street
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 lights and roads are getting damaged day by day most of the
street
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light
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 are defective.
This
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street
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 is
main
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the main
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 connection road to reach the downtown and
highway
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the highway
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. Because of
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this
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 conditions the pedestrians and vehicle users of our locality not using
this
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 path and using another way which extended their travel
of
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 4 km. I would like you to take immediate action and repair the roads and streets.
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 place the boards and banners near
school
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the school
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 and
intersection
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 of our
street
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, Because of
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 initiative
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the accidents
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accidents
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 rate will
get
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reduce
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. Thank you for
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 action you
taken
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 and hoping to see our
street
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 development Kind regards, Rajkumar Karthik

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coherence and cohesion
Consider separating your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea.
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Make sure your opening sentence is a bit clearer and more formal in requesting assistance.
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Try to vary your sentence structure and use more complex sentences to enhance your writing tone.
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You clearly stated the issue regarding the street condition and its impact on the community.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing statement expresses gratitude and hope for the improvements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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