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In few countries people earn extremely high salaries some people think it is good for country while others think government should control the salaries

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There is small a portion of society earn extraordinary
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 in a few nations
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 beneficial for the homeland is argued by some
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. While others think there should be a limit on
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 because it is unjust for the rest of the population. I strongly agree with the
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 I will give you both sides arguments and plausible conclusions. One hand. some
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 believe that some have high incomes that are good for any country because the government secures taxes from their pays.
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, the revenue is spent for the betterment of the nation by building new schools and hospitals.
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, some companies offer good
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 to entice the most talented and well-versed professionals.
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, if you don't give high remuneration to the well-experienced and skilled worker, they start to migrate to other countries where their talent is rewarded with satisfactory
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 and economy suffer owing to brain drain.
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, it is suggested by
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 that the state should ensure the distribution of wealth evenly because wealth inequality sometimes leads to the bloodiest revolution.
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, the wealth was not being distributed among the public
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 will increase funds that can be spent on public services. In nutshell, both sides of the argument have their merits but I think a decent wage is good for the country as well as individuals because the more pay the more tax revenue. If you have good purchasing power you could give benefit to other businesses too.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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