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Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. What are the causes and give your solutions?

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Moral values
such
 as being polite and treating others with respect are important.
However
, nowadays, the youngsters are showing disdain for
such
 characteristics. They often speak rudely and behave arrogantly.
This
 essay will discuss the root causes of
this
 problem and
also
 suggest some measures to counter it. Lack of parental supervision is the main problem affecting the behaviour of young people.
Firstly
, because of their hectic work schedules,
parents
 do not have enough time to impart moral standards to their offspring. Earlier family members used to spend a lot of time together and
thus
 it was easier to pass on family principles to the young generation.
This
 is no longer the case. In many families now both
parents
 work and television has assumed the role of babysitter.
Consequently
, the younger generation has no one to correct the lapses in their actions. Movies,
in particular
, have a terrific impact on them. Oftentimes they use vulgar language and glamourize immoral conduct.
Children
 who grow up watching
such
 movies assume that it is perfectly all right to be rude to everyone.
Nevertheless
, the problem is still manageable if adults can find a few hours to be with their
children
. Young
children
 have highly impressionable minds. If
parents
 make a conscious effort to correct the flaws in their
children
’s conduct from an early age, they will grow up into respectful adults who do not throw their weight around. It is equally important for
parents
 to resist the temptation to be overindulgent. When
children
 behave impolitely, they should be punished inappropriate ways to send home the message that
such
 an attitude is not acceptable.
Parents
 should
also
 check whom their
children
 are hanging out with after school and what they are watching on TV. Telling moral stories to very young
children
 is
also
 a great way to ensure that they learn values. In conclusion,
children
 are like pieces of clay that can be moulded into any shape. By teaching them appropriate behaviour from a very young age,
parents
 can raise them into polite individuals who treat others with respect and kindness.
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