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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems?

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The given diagram provides information about the present layout of a university's
sports
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area
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 and it
also
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 shows the layout of it after
it's
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its
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 redevelopment. Overall, it can be depicted that major changes will occur in three sides of the centre
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 the West, East and South. As can be seen in the layout, there are two outdoor courts in the Western and Eastern
side
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sides
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 of the reception
area
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 before the refurbishment, which will be replaced with a leisure pool and a
sports
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 hall respectively, two dance studios will be constructed
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besides
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beside
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 the
sports
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 hall. The only change which will happen
in
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on
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 the north side is that the
area
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 of the gym will be expanded.
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, two changing rooms will be constructed near the leisure pool and dance studios.
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 to that, a
sports
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 shop and a cafe will be constructed to the left and right corners of the reception
area
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