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Some people believe that we should do our best to mitigate the effects of climate change, while others believe that we should learn how to live with it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by many that
people
 should do their best to lessen global warming’s
effects
, but others believe that we should get used to living with it. I think, despite being the irreversible
effects
 that global
change
 brings about, we exactly seek to solve
this
 problem rather than accepting.
First
, without taking precautions, the condition of the world can become worse or deteriorate by only learning how to live with climate
change
.
Therefore
, we should make
people
 more conscious of its effect and take some measures to mitigate it.
For example
, government and conservation organizations promote
people
 to get about using biodegradable materials
instead
 of using disposable ones
such
 as plastics.
Hence
, we might contribute to
this
change
 positively to be a reversible effect.
However
, many scholars think that
this
 situation becomes an irreversible matter, which does not help
people
 to stop
this
change
. So, ones which encounter problems related to climate
change
 must get used to situations, resulting in decreasing its harm and damage and
thus
 saving
people
’s lives.
For instance
, in northern Turkey because of global
change
 towns flood with heavy rain and landscapes occur more often compared to the past.
Consequently
, inhabitants readjust to new conditions by changing town plans or the location of their houses. In my opinion,
although
 climate
change
’s
effects
 are rising day by day,
this
 problem only solves by humans.
Nevertheless
, it comes out with human’s mistakes, it will simply be sorted out by
people
. If the government and all
people
 cooperate with each other and
people
 are educated about its adverse
effects
, I think we cope with that situation. In conclusion, even if
people
 prefer to spend their time getting used to the world’s extraordinary conditions, they must tend to be cared to stop these conditions by being increased their awareness.
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