Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by some that we should make the prices of sugary
production
higher as a means of pushing people to intake less carbohydrate, considering how more and more processed brands consist of huge amounts of carbohydrate which lead to multiple health problems. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
view and would argue that it is neither right nor practical to try to raise the prices of sugary
products
. On the one hand, it is undeniable that highly processed food and drink
products
can be a threat to modern citizens' health conditions. "
Sugar
is the new poison", as many would say. In order to improve the taste of these
products
, manufacturers often choose to add an unhealthily high level of carbohydrate, which can cause mild addiction by spiking dopamine release in human brains according to multiple types of research across the world.
This
method is so widespread that
sugar
can even be found in the least expected things,
such
as daily seasonings like vinegar and soy sauce.
As a result
, people today are consuming an excessive dosage of
sugar
that human bodies are simply not designed to cope with. After all, mass
production
of
sugar
only started several centuries ago, yet it took tens of thousands of years for our ancestors to develop the rewarding mechanism that we have in our brains today, which both helped our species survive in the Stone Age and is slowly killing many of us today. With all that being said, I would argue that trying to raise the fare of sugary
production
would be an effort in vain, which may even cause more serious consequences for society.
First
of all, sugary food and drink commodities are fast-moving consumer
production
, often consumed rapidly and priced low, which means that consumer perception of their price changes can be below.
This
is to say, most consumers are not likely to stop buying
such
products
simply because the fee has increased by 5 cents. For families with poorer financial conditions, the bill changes might seem more obvious.
However
, while they can reduce the consumption of snacks, they cannot avoid buying daily commodities
such
as the sweetened seasoners mentioned above.
Thus
, the living cost of people will rise, and
this
may lead to serious problems for society. In conclusion, I believe that we have no reason to try to intervene with the fare of sugary
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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