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To solve the problem of traffic congestion govt should provide free public transport 24*7. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#traffic #congestion #govt #transport
It is argued that free transportation by
government
 authorities can mitigate the ever-growing problem of jams on
roads
. I personally
,
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 opine that it could be solved to a certain extent only.
This
 essay shall states how easy accessibility of convenience will reduce the number of
vehicles
 on roadways;
however
, few
people
 of society would still resort to private conveyance due to their privacy.
To begin
 with, the provision of transport
service
 by the
government
 offers to
general
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 public not only
the
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affordable but
also
the
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reliable means of
travel
. More
people
 will
travel
 on public transport the reason being no money will be charged along with round the clock
service
. Due to
this
, there would definitely be a huge reduction of
vehicles
 running on
roads
 leading to resolving the issue of
traffic
. Metro train
service
 in metropolitan cities is an example of
traffic
congestion
 though it charges
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 amount and
provide
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service
 for limited hours during
night
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.
Thus
, I agreed that if these services would be provided at odd hours
with
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free of cost,
problem
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 of
congestion
 on
roads
 by cars and
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motorbikes
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motor bikes
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 will decrease to a large extent.
However
, I believe that
few
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section
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 of society will still opt for private
vehicles
 despite the free transportation services from local authorities due to their privacy. Since these
people
 avoid sharing vehicle with strangers, prefer to use their private means of transport to
travel
.
In addition
, they find travelling alone more comfortable rather than sharing with unknown
people
.
For instance
, Many
people
 avoid bus and railway services from
government
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inspite
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in spite
 of the cheapest prices resulting in
traffic
congestion
 on
roads
.
Therefore
, it is evident that even the free round the clock
vehicles
 from
government
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 fails to reduce
traffic
 completely. In conclusion, it is clear that
although
 some
people
 still prefer their personal
vehicles
 to
travel
 yet free provisioning 24*7 transportation means from the
government
 would definitely have positive ramifications on
traffic
congestion
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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