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the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

#olympic #medals #twelve #countries
The chart gives some data about the amount of Olympic
medals
 got by twelve various countries. The kinds of
the
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medals
 are gold and silver and bronze. Overall, the maximum medal numbers belonged to the USA,
in
contrast
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 the minimum show was got by Japan. With regards to the types of
medals
, the high rate according to gold, silver, bronze was introduced in the USA and the alone country had just above 2000
medals
. The closest rival was the Soviet Union with 1000
medals
.
Finally
, shows of
Germany
 and Italy were relatively closer to each other,
nevertheless
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Germany
 outnumbered Italy. In terms of closer pointers in the chart, the indexes of Hungary, Sweden and Australia were closer to each other,
however
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 the least was appreciated just under 500 in Australia,
on the
contrary
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 the top number was got by Sweden almost closer to 500
medals
.
Lastly
, the pointers of East
Germany
, Japan and China were similar, on top of that the high number was appreciated just above 250 in East
Germany
,
in
contrast
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 the statistic happened by Japan.
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