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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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nations,biological parents are allowed to decide to send their wards to one-gender institutes or mixed-sex academies.A certain number of individuals believe that
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 learning from single-sex faculties have consequences in
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 viewpoints and will give my opinion with relevant examples. On the one hand,
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 are studying in single-sex schools are more into their studies rather than being in relationships.
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 in 2020, single-sex institutes had more percentage of passed students rather than others.
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,many wards are not able to present their real role and their ability
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 full of boys and girls due to their shy nature.
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 are being bullied by the opposite genders like boys are
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 due to their skinny body and girls due to fashion reasons.
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,there are some consequences of sending
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 into one-gender faculties
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 as they will have lack of confidence while talking to other people in
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 because they will face
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 genders at their workplace.
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 wards will stay at one point and will not do more efforts to increase the percentage.For illustration,according to professors,it can be seen that in normal schools,peers with different genders are co-operating with each other and learning things quickly due to
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 pros and cons of sending
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 into
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 academy because they will not be confident in the
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 and will have lack of
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.So,guardians should think about
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 statements before taking any steps for their child's
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • social interaction
  • real-world preparation
  • gender stereotypes
  • academic performance
  • healthy competition
  • personal and professional settings
  • reinforce
  • collaborate
  • representative environment
  • promote gender equality
  • break down stereotypes
  • social pressures
  • academic concentration
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