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Writing Samples
Band 6

Practice 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter, •describe the situation •explain why you cannot continue at this time •say what action you would like to take You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any ad

#practice #minutes #job #course #tutor #•describe #situation #•explain #time #•say #action #ad
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Dear tutor, I am writing to you in order to let you know that, unfortunately, I can
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 longer continue my studies.
This
 is because
by
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 the time I got enrolled, I was unemployed. But, as I informed you
last
 week, since the
begining
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beginning
 of
november
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 I started a part-time job as
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a weitress
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weitress
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waitress
 and bartender at the Ritz Hotel.
This
 job will not only allow me to support my
universtiy
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university
 studies next year
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 but will give me the opportunity to gain
unvaluable
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valuable
 experience for a future post. Taking into account that the course of "hotel manager" I was involved in is connected with the practice I am currently doing, I would like you to suggest that, in order to not
to
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loose
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 my points, the school could consider
this
 experience as a part of the final exam. In
this
 case, I could
suscribe
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subscribe
in
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 a new edition of the course, and attend only the
sylabus
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syllabus
 related
with
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 the
theorical
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theoretical
 subjects.
In addition
, I consider that with the experience I could gain from my actual duty, my contribution to the institution in a new
relase
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release
 of
this
 academic offer would be a must, in case you are considering
to hire
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 new professors to deliver
this
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these
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 studies. I look forward to
hear
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 from you soon. Yours, sincerely, Mike Thompson
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task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, clearly explaining your situation, the reason for discontinuing, and suggesting actions. Make sure each part of your letter is developed equally. Consider expanding on your solution regarding the experience as part of the exam more comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of ideas is generally clear, but some sentences and connections can be improved for better clarity. For instance, clarify the transition between your current job and its relevance to your studies.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, which is suitable for this task and audience.
coherence cohesion
You used an appropriate greeting and sign-off for a formal letter, which contributes positively to the structure.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a specific part of the task, maintaining focus and contributing to overall clarity.
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