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Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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When we talk about student’s overall growth, It does not only include their growth in regular studies, we
also
 determine how active and functioning they are in
extra- curricular
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extracurricular
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 activities. These
non academic
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 activities play
crucial
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 role in student’s development. As we know not all students are good at studying,
instead
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 they have many hidden talents which can be exposed by asking them to participate in
such
 programs. I am fully in a favour of fact that
extra-curriculars
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extra-curricular
 are important in a student’s life. Encouraging school children to get involved in various exercises will aid them to improve on various factors
such
 as confidence, personality development, stamina and cognitive functions. It is highly exceptional because we have examples like Sachin Tendulkar who is
legendary
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 figure in cricket. His biopic has clearly made us understand how his parents were so supportive
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 his playing hobby and they pushed him for coaching. I feel being
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 worm should not be the only option. To face
this
 competitive world one should always go beyond his/her limits and showcase their interest in
such
 programs where they can feel motivated and confident and can actively participate in extra classroom activities. Students can themselves identify their own strengths and weakness and work on them
accordingly
. In
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 they can give a try for unique careers. They can seek what they really want and become successful
also
 most importantly they can be happy. In conclusion, it is very important to keep an extra-curricular should be a part of the academics for better involvement and motivates children to be regular to school.
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