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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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The given pie charts provide information about the ratio of daily
intake
 of different
nutrients
 by an average person in the USA who consumes these
nutrients
 in each meal and in
snacks
, it
also
 states that these
nutrients
 may be unhealthy if they are consumed more. Overall, it can be depicted that the percentage of
intake
 of Sodium and Saturated fat was more in dinner and that of added sugar was more in
snacks
. As can be seen in the chart, the ratio of
intake
 of Sodium was the same in breakfast and
snacks
 which were 14 per
cent
.
Moreover
, it was 29 per
cent
 and 43 per
cent
 in lunch and dinner respectively.
On the other hand
, the percentage of consumption of Saturated fat and added sugar was same in breakfast which was 16 per
cent
 and
also
 these
nutrients
 contribution was least in breakfast, the percentage
intake
 of saturated fat was more in lunch as compared to
snacks
 and in the same manner that of added sugar was more in dinner in the comparison to lunch.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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