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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years, many countries have abolished the
death
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 sentence in their laws and a large number of
people
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 are starting to wonder what it will be like when there is no
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death
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 penalty.
People
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 have actually differed about it. I agree with the idea that government should retain the
death
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excution
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execution
 in their law.
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 of all, capital
punishment
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 curbs the crime rate in society because the purpose of the
death
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 penalty is not only to punish serious offenders
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 but
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 to be the most severe warning for those who intend to commit similar crimes,
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 minimizing the repetition of similar crimes in future. For
intance
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delinquent
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 who
create
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 a sensation
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 as treason, massacre,drug trafficking,... will become an example to deter
citizen
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 from following said acts.
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, reducing the num of criminals will in turn improve the safety of the community,
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 creating a safe society where
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 can best develop in both personality and intelligence.
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, there
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 some countries without the
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 penalty but
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 have a low crime rate.
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, in Norway,
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 of
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, they believe that prisoners should be converted, rehabilitated and restored to dignity. It is a humanitarian policy.
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, most countries still enforce
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capital
punishment
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 because they believe that there should be mechanisms to prevent
law breaking
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 so that innocent
people
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 can live a peaceful life. In conclusion, despite the fact that capital
punishment
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 has some disadvantages, I strongly think that it proves to be the best way to control criminals and to indirectly protect model citizens.
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