Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. In what ways are computers a hindrance? What is your opinion? Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
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is considered as an essential tool which everybody must
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one but others argued that it is
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hindrance that can lead to negative consequences. In
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I am going to discuss
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and cons
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the use of
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and
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I will give my opinion.
Firstly
, I believe that
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is one of the most relevant inventions during the
last
century due to the fact that it has changed our way of living
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today It is possible to do everything sitting in front of the screen for
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we can read a newspaper, watching a film and
also
attending a lesson online.
Moreover
,
this
outstanding instrument
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us to work in distance, far from our office and the importance of that come out during the lock-down when the companies were closed and the people started to work from their home.
Although
several people think that
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can be useful, someone else said that it can be more a hindrance with adverse consequences
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our personal dates could be stolen by
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hacker who has access to our device,
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,
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particular for youth, the
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computer
can be a problem because teenager could spend too much time in front of the screen
instead
of going out and having
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in real life. In conclusion, I think that
computer
can be extremely useful but we have to know the critical and adverse consequences
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using
this
device and
this
could be important for young people who use
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a computer
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every day meanwhile they ignore the risks
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