Some people believe that money is the best gift for teenagers while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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agrue
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argue
agree
argues
that giving
money
to
teenager
can spoil their habits. Gifts are
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way to fulfil their needs.
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, some people are favouring of giving
money
to
adolesence
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adolescence
to handle their own needs.
Adolesence
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Adolescence
is
crucial
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time of
life
span, during
this
period takes their
habbits
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habits
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throughout
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through out
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the
life
. We would discuss merits and
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demerits
wheather
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whether
gifts or pocket
money
is
best
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the best
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way for
teenager
. On one hand, In
adolesence
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adolescence
period, it is time when children pass in young stage and gain
habbits
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habits
which they carry through
the
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life
. There are
a lots
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a lot
lots
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of
cruosity
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curiosity
in their mind, they think if some gift them
money
they can satisfy their
requirments
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requirements
.
For
example
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adolesence
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adolescence
adolescents
want to buy books to enhance their knowledge.
As a
result
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they would feel happy and confident.
In
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other hand
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,
Money
gives them
freedom
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the freedom
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to
teenger
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teenager
teenagers
to spent as they wish. In today's era,
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a teenager
the teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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can indulge in bad habits like
consumption
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the consumption
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of illegal drugs. It would not be
wise
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a wise
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decision to give them
money
since they can
easly
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easily
stuck
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in
trap
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the trap
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of drug
padelers
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paddlers
peddlers
. Consumption of
drug
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drugs
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can tarnish their
life
. I conclude that limited
money
can be given to
teenager
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teenagers
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accordin
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according
g to their
requirment
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requirement
requirements
under the
supervison
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supervision
of one's parents. They should monitor their spending habits and provide the
guidence
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guidance
if they feel to do so.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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