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Some People Believe Online Reading Materials Should Only Be Used For A Child To Learn To Read, Whereas Others Believe Only Printed Material Should Be Used. Discuss Both Views And Give Your Opinion.

#people #materials #child
Some
people
 prefer children to learn to read online.
However
, others prefer children to learn to read with
paper
. Online books can bring it everywhere, but
paper
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 is better for your eyes than technology. My opinion is, I will choose online rather than printed material. In the future, more
people
 will use mechanics to read
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 the development of technology. It is portable, so it is very easy to carry out and it would not take place in your bags.
In addition
, reading online books has more variations than going to a bookstore.
On the other hand
, there are negatives. Online means reading on the phone, tablet or computer. These materials make your eyesight worse and
also
, children could not understand and the sites will take money.
For example
, most
of
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internet
 sites have advertisements and if they wrongly press it,
then
 it will jump to an unrelated site. These
internet
 sites are not good for studying.
Paper
 is good for your eyes. Most
of
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people
 said reading in printed books will make the brain more active. For learning, it is better to use
paper
. Whereas, after reading, it bothers the space and
people
 start to throw it away.
This
 is a waste of
paper
. They have to cut down trees to make,
as a result
, it will lead to global warming. In conclusion, I prefer to use the
internet
 to learn to read. There are some negatives, but these can be solved. For eyesight, now in the world, there are blue light cut glasses, which can protect eyes from loads. For
internet
 advertisements, now in phones and
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 there are applications to read.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online reading materials
  • printed materials
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • technology
  • convenience
  • interactivity
  • accessibility
  • visual appeal
  • physical books
  • parental guidance
  • digital skills
  • screen time
  • learning experience
  • personal preference
  • comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • word recognition
  • grammar
  • vocabulary development
  • reading habits
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