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A University should accept male and female students equally in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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In recent years, the trend toward female education has been totally changed. A section of society thought that these days males and females do not have any kind of discrimination based on
gender
 that's why
universities
 need to allocate fifty per cent seats for females. I partially agree with
this
 statement and I think for some
subjects
this
 idea is good but other
subjects
 admissions are based on their qualification. In the course of the essay, I will argue my point of view.
First
 of all, there are professions that are equally in demand which cover both
gender
 problems. In most countries, people are not discussing their problems with the opposite
gender
. In these
subjects
,
universities
 should need to reserve half of the
admission
 for girls
although
 they have their basic education requirements.
For instance
, In the medical field have a number of situations where the opposite
gender
 does not feel comfortable discussing their personal health issues.
In addition
, the same situation happens in the judiciary their women better pursue other women trials rather
men
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. Some occupations need a good qualification.
Secondly
. a lot of jobs demand well educated and experienced people, so in that
subjects
,
universities
 give
admission
 on their qualification rather than reservation. Government and parents need to put light on those areas which are weak in boys and girls and they get their
admission
 on merit.
For example
, an engineer who came from that process of reservation and they design a thing that will be used by many people, if it will not work properly and got an accident
then
 who is responsible. In conclusion, In some
subjects
 where human lives are not involved there,
universities
 reserve half of the
admission
 for women while in those
subjects
 where human lives are involved their
admission
 are based on merit in
universities
.
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