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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

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There are certain advantages and disadvantages of living in
cities
 and the countryside.
However
, some people are focusing on living in the village is more fruitful than in
cities
, but I personally disagree with the statement as there are more advantages living in the metropolitan than country. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the pros and cons of living in
cities
 and villages before the conclusion. Countryside life is more relaxed and easier going. The environment is less polluted.
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 are more independent as they go to school on their own. Most of the teenager take on their responsibilities at a young age because they start helping their parents in the field and handling cattle. They are healthier as they get a fresh environment with fresh food. There are few dropbacks being in the village.
First
 of all, the most of big universities are near the
cities
 and the children have to move to
cities
 for higher education. It becomes difficult for them to adjust to the metropolitan due to pollution and sharp life. The subsequent concern is medical
facilities
. In the village, medical
facilities
 are not easily available. For better treatment, villagers travel to
cities
. As far as, life in the metropolitan is concerned, children are more dependant on their parents as they are not allowed to go out without supervision because of traffic and the high rate of criminal activities. But there are more advantages than disadvantages. Health
facilities
 are easily available close by. The modern education system has been introduced in the schools and children in the
cities
 are getting benefits from the new schooling systems. It is concluded that living in the
cities
 is better than villages as eventually for higher studies and better medical
facilities
, the villagers have to move to
cities
.
Therefore
, I disagree with the statement.
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