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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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These days,
immigration
 has been a remarkable issue bringing a large number of negative effects on the community in general. There are 2 prime causes leading to unstable society all over the world and I will explain them below. It is an undeniable fact that sudden changes in the population of a nation are affected by government policies that are deemed useless and ineffective to meet
people
's needs.
For example
, in the 20th century, a considerable flow of citizens in East Germany who were controlled by unnecessary strict rules of the government secretly move to West Germany at night and a lot of them were killed. The fundamental right of
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 is to pursue a satisfying life and happiness, as a matter of fact, that enormous
immigration
 occurring is obvious. Another explanation for
this
 negative problem is the desire to reach farfetched life targets
such
 as prosperity or luxurious life in another country,
for instance
, it was an obsession of USA President Donald Trump was attempting to build the wall to halt the flow of immigrated
people
 from Mexico.
This
 alarming fact leads to some unexpected consequences accumulating the upward trend in the number of social crimes. Studies have indicated that 20% of crimes in the USA originating from illegal
immigration
 activities that widen the entrance for uneducated
people
 and dangerous crimes.
As a result
, it will spoil the safety of other true citizens and make society an untrustworthy place.
Moreover
, with the lack of a qualified workforce, the strength of the economy is threatened and
people
 must pay high-end taxes to recover. Overall, the disadvantages of
Immigration
 far outweigh that of benefits and are actually a nightmare with any host countries In conclusion, there are a lot of plausible explanations making
this
 problem more clearly and its results are completely negative. In the foreseeable future, I confidently believe we can address
this
 problem and even take advantage of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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