Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

If asked whether it is switching a
job
or keeping it that gives a more
sense
of satisfaction. While I agree that changing a
job
may bring some benefits, I think that staying in a
job
for a long
time
can give people a
sense
of
fulfillment
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. There are some merits to
job hopping
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. The
first
reason is that youngsters can have a chance to experience various working conditions and
thus
, they acquire more skills.
In addition
, they can put their experience gained from previous employment into practice and receive recognition at
new
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workplace. Another reason is that by switching a
job
, people may stand a chance of experiencing various working places,
therefore
they can find what suits them best.
For example
, those who dislike the idea of having a steady
job
or a desk
job
may find a more
sense
of
fulfillment
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by switching a
job
.
However
, staying at a
job
for a long
time
may bring some tangible benefits.
Firstly
, when a company decide who to promote or to dismiss, both dedication and experience are taken into consideration.
Moreover
, people who keep a profession long term have a better
job
prospect
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, including
job
promotion and pay rises.
Secondly
, there are some perks following when adults stay in a
job
for a long term, namely sick leave, yearly bonuses, and holiday
entilments
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entitlements
entitlement
entailments
.
Besides
, staying with a career for a long
time
can help adults to establish a wide and sustainable
networks
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of long-term partners. In conclusion,
although
job hopping
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has its own benefit, staying a
job
for a long
time
may bring more
sense
of
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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