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Crime rates in most countries is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. What do you think? What can be done to reduce crime rate?

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In today's era, the illegal activity ratio is increasing in
cities
 of some nations than in countryside fields. I totally agree with
this
 statement, in the following ,paragraphs I will discuss the reasons for high offences and will give solutions to shrink
this
 rate with my opinion.
Firstly
, the main cause of violence in towns is overpopulation because most of the people are living in
cities
 for their best future and education of their children
that is
 why municipalities are
conjusted
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conducted
confused
 and full of crowds which are giving stress to mortals and they start fighting.
Secondly
, unemployment is the main cause of violation because youngsters are moving to urban zones in the search of jobs. Due to a lot of ,
a
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competition they are following illegal paths to get work.
For instance
, in a ,survey it was clear that offences were higher due to lack of workplaces because of the population in
cities
. At
last
 but not least, environmental changes can be another reason for the higher ratio of offences because of various cultures and mutual understanding.
However
, there are some actions that can decrease crime rates to keep towns safer just like rural areas. The
first
 and foremost step is to provide higher educational sources in agricultural regions that will help in reducing the population in urban areas.
Moreover
, unity in all kinds of religions can be a positive point for diminishing offence ratio, so the government should do surveys in different parts of towns for measuring relations to improve friendship zones and co-ordination towards each other.For illustration, if mortals will know each other and will have better communication skills
then
 they can easily ask for favours and peace around them. To conclude, it is clear that the main reason for excessive violation is unemployment due to fewer educational sources because of that people are moving to
cities
 which can be prevented by some efforts of society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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