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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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"To be honest
this
 topic is extremely unfamiliar to me because I've never researched a little bit about businesses.
However
, I will try my best to do
this
 test. Now, I am going to tell you about one of the most successful small enterprises which I have known. If I'm not mistaken, it was a usual day a single year ago, when I went around HN with my brother in order to find a reputational
English
 Centre. What we found after going around and around was an exceptional
English
 hub training IELTS named
Langmaster
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Ringmaster
. I was
first
 attracted to its billboards' major
color
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, which was my
favorite
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color
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, red. The
English
center's
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 owner was a young man, who was just over 30 years old. When I met her, I was really admired her because she was succeeded extremely early. Some Yeats before I found it, that hub had just been a tiny
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center
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 located near the heart of a district in Ha Noi. Over the years, they’ve expanded the
business
 and employed, and especially their reputation. They have
also
 opened more and more branches situated around Ha Noi city and other provinces. There is a wide range of reasons why I found that enterprise was successful.
First
 of all, that
business
 had transformed from a small into a medium one for a few years, which is pretty tough for most enterprises in the same field.
Secondly
, they have victoriously managed their staff and plans in order to operate the
business
 well. In spite of the fact that active and reliable people are really hard, the hub successfully employed a wonderful staff
Last
 but not least, I was completely persuaded by that
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center
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. If you tell or not but I considered myself a bit of a choosy person.
therefore
, they would be trustworthy enough for me to join in. So
that is
 why I found the
business
 was extremely successful in creating their own fame."
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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