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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to Single-Sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, parents have the freedom to choose to send their kids to schools depending on their preference. By attending a single-sex school, the disadvantage
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 the long run outweighs the advantage.
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, children who
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 the same gender school only interacts with the same sex. Whereas
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 who take part in
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 school.
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 will lead to the lack of knowledge on personality differences among opposite genders.
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, one might join a field of work
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 has more employees of the opposite sex. He might not know how to conduct himself in
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 setting which leads to
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 the work environment.
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, girls and boys think differently and have varied perspectives on things.
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, the kids will have
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 time blending in the society in the future compared to children who attended co-educational schools. All in all, parents should take into consideration that the schools they choose to put their kids in will have a vital role that plays in their future life.
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  • social interaction
  • real-world preparation
  • gender stereotypes
  • academic performance
  • healthy competition
  • personal and professional settings
  • reinforce
  • collaborate
  • representative environment
  • promote gender equality
  • break down stereotypes
  • social pressures
  • academic concentration
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