Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Whether
freedom
of choice should be allowed to children
or not is a highly controversial topic in the
society. Some section of the society believes that if Correct article usage
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children
are given liberty in taking decision
regarding the day-to-day activities it is possible that they will centralize themselves, while others are of the belief that it is significant to give children
the privilege to take their own decision
. I opine with the latter view.
On one hand, some people think that if a child is given excessive freedom
to choose about everyday matters, it is likely that it will result in individualism. It is true that if children
are not guided at an early age about the matters like what to eat or what to wear and which shows to watch,
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they will have a negative impact on their personality and he or she will become selfish and will not think about the consequences resulting out of the act performed by them. Replace the word
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As a result
, they will grow up to be a self centric
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For instance
, In the western countries parents allow their children
to take own decisions and don't guide them, hence
, children
tend to not obey and they do not think about other's opinion.
On the other hand
, many people believe that children
should be given freedom
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after a certain age as it will make them think out of the box and make them feel confident in their life. Fix the agreement mistake
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For example
, if parents have exercised reasonable control on the child at their developmental stage then
they will possess important leadership skills like decision
making.
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children
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite